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Im my view, I disagree to the idea people today spend too much time for their personal enjoyment because of two reasons.

First, I don’t see such a kind of difference in the people’s life between contemporary people and previous people. Regardless of the era, some people spend their life time for themselves and other people spend the one for other people or doing something good for others.
For example, when I was a little kid, the presence of local community was bigger and we were very close to the local community. In that environment, there were many chances to help with each other. If my mother is out of town, neighbors invited me to their home to have a dinner together. So that was the time that people spend their time for others or common community.
On the other hand, I see more people today who participate in provono or some volunteer activity for their community. Even it’s not for just neighbors, it’s sure that there’re many people who want to spend their time to do something good for their society.

Second, I believe the important value for people get to similar because IT was well evolved and the world has been getting smaller and closer. It’s different from the previous era but the contemporary people more see the reality in the world and recognize the social problems or challenges existing in the world. For example, regardless whether you’re in Africa or in US, many people want to solve the problem in Africa and believe solving or helping to solve the problem is valuable to themselves. So I believe it’s dynamic change of the value sense and people are living for all now.

In conclusion, because of two reasons mentioned above, I disagree to the statement.