secretary: Welcome to Los Angeles Hospital. How can I help you?

Patient: I'm sorry to say this, but i'm very unhappy with the service.

secretary: What's the problem?

Patient: I've been calling all the week to set an appointment with the doctor, but nobody answers the phone.

Secretary: Oh, im sorry to hear that. I will schedule you an appointment right now

patient: Thank you

Secretary: Is there somerging else i can do for you?

Patient: Yes, improve your telephone service.

Secretary: Of course we will.

Patient: Thank you for the attention. この表現は自然ですか？

Question

secretary: Welcome to Los Angeles Hospital. How can I help you?

Patient: I'm sorry to say this, but i'm very unhappy with the service.

secretary: What's the problem?

Patient: I've been calling all the week to set an appointment with the doctor, but nobody answers the phone.

Secretary: Oh, im sorry to hear that. I will schedule you an appointment right now

patient: Thank you

Secretary: Is there somerging else i can do for you?

Patient: Yes, improve your telephone service.

Secretary: Of course we will.

Patient: Thank you for the attention. この表現は自然ですか？

DanielM27 · Accepted Answer

Perfecto, solo un pequeño consejo:
Patient: I've been calling all the week

El "the" no es necesario ;)

Rhiannnnn · Answer

It is a little unnatural towards the end. 
"I've been calling all the week" -> "I've been calling all week"

"Is there somerging else I can do for you?" -> "Is there something else I can do for you?"
Or, "Is there anything else that I can assist you with?" 

"Yes, improve your telephone service," It is better to be more polite, "Yes, please improve your telephone service,"

"Of course we will," they will usually say, "Certainly, I will get that arranged for you,"

"Thank you for the attention," No one will say this, instead, say, "Thank you for your service," or, "Thank you for your cooperation,"

Hope this helps!

Perfecto, solo un pequeño consejo:Patient: I've been calling all the weekEl "the" no es necesario ;)

Perfecto, solo un pequeño consejo:Patient: I've been calling all the weekEl "the" no es necesario ;)

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Perfecto, solo un pequeño consejo:
Patient: I've been calling all the week

El "the" no es necesario ;)

Perfecto, solo un pequeño consejo:
Patient: I've been calling all the week

El "the" no es necesario ;)